Allison Brennan: Truthful Fiction

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New York Times Bestselling Author Allison Brennan is a former consultant in the California State Legislature and lives in Northern California with her husband and five children. Her eighth romantic thriller, TEMPTING EVIL, is on sale 5/20/08.

Truthful Fiction

I make-up stories. My books are fiction and I’m an expert at nothing. I know a little bit about a lot of stuff, which is both a blessing and a curse.

I’m keenly aware that I don’t know everything (please, do not tell my children this fact!) I did a bit of research for my first three books-just enough, frankly, to realize that I had become dangerous-to myself.

There are two mistakes beginning writers-many of whom are published-make. The first is to not do any research and make up everything, stretching credibility. I’m willing to suspend disbelief if the story and writing is good enough, but some things I have a hard time forgiving. The other extreme is putting in too much information. You learn something new, become an “expert” on-for example-how internet feeds can hide their location. Then you show-off your knowledge to your readers, often resulting in long, boring passages. And unless you ARE a computer expert, you’re going to get something wrong.

I received some great advice from two published author friends of mine. The first is married to a retired cop. She laughs at errors in books related to law enforcement. She told me, “Less is more.” Don’t over-explain because unless you’ve walked the beat, you really don’t know much about being a cop. My other friend, a retired FBI Agent, said, “You’re writing fiction. You can make it work.”

Yes, I write fiction and therefore I can break and bend a lot of rules. But because I really want my stories to have a flavor of reality, I want them to be as accurate as possible. I’ve become addicted to research.

Right now, I’m in the middle of the FBI’s Citizen’s Academy. This is the most fun I’ve ever had learning something new. The reason I wanted to do this was because I’m launching an FBI series in early 2009, but in my current “Prison Break” trilogy I have FBI agents as either major or secondary characters.

Tempting Evil (Prison Break, Book 2)

The premise of my series is the “best of the best” Evidence Response Team members form a unit at Quantico to handle high-profile and complex cases, like multi-jurisdictional serial killers, mass murderers, and kidnappings. I’ve done a lot of research on ERT and am fascinated by their dedication and training. ERT members train and specialize in different areas, like firearms, bombs, forensic anthropology, etc. They are full Special Agents, but have an added skill or talent and are sent out to crime scenes to collect and process evidence like a traditional local criminalist would do. One high-profile case they worked near where I live was the Yosemite murders. The ERT unit processed the burned car where two of the victims were found. They are used on federal cases or when local law enforcement requests help-particularly helpful in smaller districts who can’t afford their own crime scene team.


I was very happy with my premise, until I talked to the PR guy at my local FBI office and learned that the beauty of the ERT program was that each of the 56 regional offices has an ERT and the purpose is to be able to respond quickly to a crime scene. Having a national unit sort of defeats the purpose of the program.

I was a bit upset learning this. But, because this is fiction, I figured I would just go with my original plan. I’ll admit, I’d lost a little love I had for the series and was considering coming up with a completely different idea.

My first night at the citizen’s academy, we learned the priorities for the FBI. After 9/11, the number one priority is counterterrorism. No brainer there. Protecting our country from another terrorist attack, foreign or domestic, is crucial to the health and safety of the public.


The second priority is counterintelligence. Then Cyber crimes (which includes online child pornography.) Then public corruption. Followed by civil rights, criminal enterprises (RICO), white collar crime, and finally . . . violent crime.


Violent crime was at the bottom of the list. This doesn’t mean that the FBI won’t get involved in a case when asked by local law enforcement-they will. But it means that the violent crime squad has fewer staff and resources than the other units. This is largely because violent crime generally stays within local law enforcement jurisdiction, and local cops are well trained to handle robberies and homicides and other such crimes. If a life is in immediate danger-such as the kidnapping of a child-the FBI will make that the number one priority. But for all intents and purposes, violent crime is no longer a priority.

This actually works very well for my FBI series premise. Why? Because if violent crime is not a priority of the bureau, then having an elite team focused on violent crimes has merit. To be honest, I highly doubt that the FBI in this current global climate would create a national ERT unit to focus on violent crime. BUT I can make it work for my story-which is fiction.

In my book FEAR NO EVIL, a very small sub-plot revolved around the disappearance of Monique Paxton. We (the readers) know that she was murdered by the villain. What we learn near the end of the book is that her family never knew her fate. When one of the villains reveals the information about her murder and how her body was disposed, her father finally has closure. In one paragraph I created the backstory for my entire new premise without intending to do so. Jonathon Paxton, Monique’s father, ran for public office on an anti-crime platform after Monique disappeared. Over the years, he worked himself up into higher and higher offices, and is now a US Senator, all on a strong anti-crime platform.

We’re now getting into an area I know something about. After 13 years working in the California State Legislature, I know that lots of legislators come in with pet projects. If it’s something we don’t like or it only benefits their individual district, we call it pork. If it’s something we do like, we call it desperately needed legislation. So in my first FBI book, SUDDEN DEATH (4/09) I’m using Senator Paxton as the vehicle to get funding for a special FBI squad that focuses on violent crime-serial killers, mass murderers, missing and exploited children, and kidnappings.

My premise holds. Likely? Probably not. Plausible? Absolutely. I can sell the idea because Senator Paxton believes strongly in this, so strongly he’s willing to put his political future on the line to fund the program through a budget trailer bill. If his character is strong enough, I think all my readers will believe in not only the program, but that it could be done in real life.

There are a lot of misconceptions about the FBI and what they do (and don’t do.) Before 9/11, the FBI was a reactionary agency. A crime occurred, they investigated. Now, the FBI is proactive, hence the focus on counterterrorism and counterintelligence. They want to stop disasters before they happen.


Most of the successes of the FBI and the other national agencies are classified. We’re not going to read about them in the newspaper. Sleeper cells destroyed, terrorists taken out over seas, stopping an attack by having a strong presence at a major event. People become complacent when there’s nothing big or sexy being reported. They think, wrongfully, that terrorism isn’t a threat any more, or the terrorists who attacked on 9/11 were a few crazy idiots. But the threat is there, and it’s not going away, and our diligence and strength is keeping them at bay.

There’s so much more I could write about! I’ve had three classes (and a day at the gun range) and each day I came up with an idea for a book. One of them I’m really excited about because it centered around an informant whose motivations and conflicts were so clear in my mind that I could see her as a fully-developed character.

I’m going to wrap this up and visit again in a couple of weeks with more details about how the FBI operates and how to use it-or not-in fiction. But I thought I’d go on my bully pulpit for a moment and discuss the other night’s final presentation on cybercrimes against children.

The SSA in charge of this unit takes his job seriously. Child pornography is a widespread and devastating crime. We’re not talking about naked kids in a bathtub; we’re talking about violent and abusive sexual assault against children-the majority of them infants and toddlers. Yes, babies and small boys and girls. There’s a threshold that the FBI looks into-the child has to be 12 or under. Prepubescent. This isn’t to say that the FBI won’t get involved in a violent crime against a teenager, but because the breadth of this problem, they have to prioritize their resources to protecting and rescuing the youngest of the victims.

Those who prey on the most innocent of the innocent should be dealt with harshly, but unfortunately, as the SSA said: “There is not enough law enforcement in the country to combat this problem.”

If every cop in America focused on child pornography, they’d make only a dent in the distribution of these hideous videos. A recent law enforcement operation discovered 20,000 computers in Virginia alone with downloaded child pornography videos. Yes-videos of sex with young children that are downloaded off the Internet every minute of every day. Over 20,000 sick perverts who watched sexual violence against children.

One case study showed that it doesn’t take long for a adult porn addict to turn to child pornography. A 60-year-old-man was arrested for enticing a 15-year-old girl to commit sexual acts over a webcam. He’d been a legal adult porn addict his entire life, and in one chat room had an exposure to child porn. At first he rejected it, disgusted. But over a few months, he’d become desensitized to the adult porn that had satisfied his addiction for decades. He started looking at more violent porn, then child porn, then violent child porn, then he reached out to victims. This downfall took eight months. Eight months from exposure to child porn to attempted sexual assault.

These men and women who spend countless hours chatting with these men online in order to stop them, viewing child porn videos in the hopes of identifying the child in order to rescue him/her, need to be commended for their dedication and commitment. It is not easy to view the hideous and disturbing videos that are available online. Each child in these videos is a victim of violent, sexual abuse. Most of the law enforcement officers and support staff use their own time to track these predators, in addition to their regular jobs. Truly unsung heroes.

I’m happy to answer questions if anyone has them. I’ll post in a couple of weeks more information about the academy and how to use crime research in novels.

Lee, thanks so much for having me today!

You can visit Allison on her website

Allison also writes a weekly blog over  at Murder She Writes


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17 replies
  1. Allison Brennan
    Allison Brennan says:

    Hey Amanda! Nice to see you here 🙂 . . . I love research, and I really love hands on research. I had a tour of the Sacramento County Morgue recently and it was one of the best things I did for my writing career. I used a bit of what I learned in one scene I added to PLAYING DEAD just because it was cool. Well, I needed to get some information to my heroine at the same time, so it wasn’t filler, but I simply changed the location so I could have the conversation at the morgue rather than her house. Watching an autopsy on tv is one thing; in real life it’s a completely different and eye-opening experience!

    Hi Terry (again 🙂 . . . what I meant about competition was more a friendly competition, and there’s a bit of frustration on the part of some (not all) local law enforcement that the feds get the cool toys. Sometimes a locality simply doesn’t have the resources to handle a case. This happens a lot in rural areas, and having the feds come in is both frustrating and a godsend. I think *most* of the time they work well together, but all you need is one bad apple and he taints the bureau for everyone. I do think that television overplays the animosity, but not the natural distance. I thought one episode of Numb3rs showed a good representation of this, when the LA sergeant (I think he was) worked with the feds on an old gang-related case when a long-dead body was found. They have the same goals, but sometimes different motivations or methodology lead to conflict.

    Bill, I’ve been wanting to do a ride-along for a long time. It’s hard because of the hours and since I have a bunch of kids. It’s on my to-do list for 2009, and I have a contact with both the sheriff’s department and my local pd.

    Hi Clair! Good idea about putting info on the website. I do that through my blog or doing guest articles like this. I love what I learn, but I know that my readers want it integrated into the story, not a lecture. I try to do that as best I can. I think the important thing is, we (as writers) need to understand the information and be able to present it through story. When I worked in the Legislature, one of my primary responsibilities was to read complex and controversial legislation and summarize it in one page or less for the average busy constituent to understand. I didn’t dwell on the technical aspects or the exceptions (unless of course the exceptions made the bill untenable) but instead focused on the GOAL of the bill, because that I can sell a lot easier. Same as in writing. My goal is to give the reader a story not a lecture, so I focus all research to that end. Less is more 🙂

  2. ljsellers
    ljsellers says:

    Thanks for a great post. It’s reassuring to know that with enough research, you can “make it work” in fiction. I’ve had readers correct me for using “Street” when 16th is really an “Avenue,” so I worry about getting the law enforcement details exactly right. You’ve inspired me to contact the local detective who gives me background information and ask for a closer look at the internal workings of the police department.

  3. clair dickson
    clair dickson says:

    This was a cool post– and a nice place to share what you’ve learned. =)

    It’s tempting to share all that new knowledge, but just as most of us (hopefully) wouldn’t go up to someone at a party and start rambling off all the neat stuff we learned, it should stay out of the story. Maybe at some notes at the end or on website if the itch to share is too big.

  4. Bill Cameron
    Bill Cameron says:

    I took the Portland Citizens Police Academy a few years ago, and aside from being a great resource, it was fun as hell. The instructors were fabulous, and the entire experience did as much to humanize police work as to inform about the nuts and bolts of procedure. I’ve always been someone who had huge respect for police work in general, but it’s one thing to think about it in the abstract and it’s another thing to sit down and talk with real people doing the job. The Citizens Police Academy was huge for me in that way, as are things like ride-alongs (easy to arrange here in Portland, and presumably lots of places).

    I’d love a chance to do the FBI Citizens Academy someday. Great post, Allison! Thank you!

  5. Terry
    Terry says:

    Allison, everyone I’ve talked to said there’s not really much ‘competition’ between agencies at the practical level. The guys in the trenches just want to get the job done. It’s usually the higher-ups who get into the pissing contests.

    Lee — I’ve already packed your book for an autograph! Don’t make me schlep it back and forth fornaught. Seriously — hope you’re feeling better. I leave on Wednesday so I can spend some time with two of my kids who live out there.

  6. AmandaStevens
    AmandaStevens says:

    Allison, great post. I’m so jealous of your Quantico experience. You really know how to research! I love this line, “I’m an expert at nothing.” This is something I always used to worry about because it seemed to be such a disadvantage not to have at least one subject on which I could write with authority. The Internet has changed that. So much information at our fingertips. It still doesn’t take the place of insider knowledge or even real-time research, but it’s made a huge difference in what I’m now willing to tackle.

  7. Allison Brennan
    Allison Brennan says:

    Hi Kendra! Nice *seeing* you again 🙂 I hope you get into the academy soon. I’m having a blast.

    JT, I wish I were in Quantico! I’m just here in Sacramento 🙂 I had an opportunity to go to Quantico with the Citizens Academy Alumni this fall, but it conflicts with a prior commitment I have speaking at the Emerald City Writers Conference in Seattle. Next trip . . .

    Hi Terry, I’m want to take a local law enforcement academy as well. The issues that local cops and feds have are sometimes similar, but also different (the same but different! LOL.) I met a SA at the gun range who had been a cop in Florida and I asked him, having been on both sides of the line, how he made the transition. He said that, with some exceptions, it’s mostly just a competition/rivalry between locals and feds, but they *usually* get along in a friendly competitive kind of way. Sort of like in my old job in the Legislature, most of the Republicans and Democrats got along on a day to day basis, but some people (on both sides) were simply jerks or power-hungry.

    Wilfred, I have so many stories like this! For example in THE KILL I needed a DNA tests ASAP. I know they take weeks, and often months (especially if it’s not an urgent case or if it’s not coming up for trial or there hasn’t been an arrest made) for a DNA test. Well, I didn’t want to wait weeks. So I made the heroine’s ex-husband the head of DNA testing at Quantico and he did it in his “own time.” I simply researched how long the ACTUAL tests took, not how long they PRACTICALLY take. It’s all who you know . . . 😉

  8. Wilfred Bereswill
    Wilfred Bereswill says:

    I’ll echo what JT said. Great Blog, Lee.

    Allison, very interesting title to the blog. My goal in writing my first book was to make it as reality based as possible. I wanted somebody to finish it and ask themselves if this could all happen. I took a few liberties with an accelerated timetable or two, but tried to keep it real all the way around. And yes, my FBI agents are performing their primary task of counter terrorism, only that priority is getting in the way of the real problem.

    I’d love to do an FBI Citizen’s Academy. I’m an avid researcher. I know they had one here in St. Louis last Fall. Which reminds me to give them a call.

  9. Terry
    Terry says:

    Hi, Allison.
    I have to agree with you about the research thing. The hard part is knowing when you don’t know something so you can look it up.

    I’ve taken the local Civilian Police Academy classes as part of my research (although I sure wish I’d done it sooner — might have kept some of those s-t-r-e-t-c-h-e-s out of my last book). Our local sheriff’s office has their alumni program, so I get to keep learning new stuff.

    Can’t wait for your next release. I’m off to Pike’s Peak where I hope to find Lee at the bar.

  10. kendraelliot
    kendraelliot says:

    Hi Allison!

    Nice to see you at one of my favorite places! You are as eloquent and passionate in your blog articles as you are in your books. I’m always looking forward to the next one. I’ve been on the waiting list for the FBI academy for a while up here. It sounds like you’re having a wonderful experience. I can’t wait. I’ll see you in SF.


  11. Allison Brennan
    Allison Brennan says:

    First, thanks Lee for having me as a guest today!

    Joyce, I think most people in law enforcement “get it” but unfortunately, about three or four years after 9/11 I noticed that people were forgetting about what happened and that there are people in the world who hate us enough to want to kill innocent civilians. But 9/11 was a culmination of a series of smaller attacks, and I think people forget that as well.

    Thanks Yvonne!

  12. yabennett
    yabennett says:

    Hi Allison,

    Such great information. I saw your article on crime scene writers and very useful. I can’t wait for your next article.


  13. Joyce Tremel
    Joyce Tremel says:

    Great post, Allison!

    And thanks for pointing out that there are still terrorists out there and the FBI is still doing their best to stop them. Working for a PD, I see the bulletins and faxes that our department gets, and yes, there are still threats that the general public never hears about.

    I’m looking forward to hearing more about the academy!

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